The feedback I got was that my thoughts seemed unorganized. When I watched my pitch again it did seem like it could be confusing to others. So, I redid my whole pitch. In this pitch I make it list-like and make it easy for possible consumers and investors to understand. I continued to speak slowly, as I have a hard time with that when talking to people.
Please give me more feedback. I have a hard time with public speaking and assignments like this.
Hi Hayley,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job on your elevator pitch and really improved. Your thoughts seemed organized and very thought out. I think one thing you should try and work on is adding an attention grabber in the begging of your pitch. This will get people’s attention right off the bat. Maybe start with a story or tell us a statistic right away. For example, in my pitch I started with a story before going into detail about my app. This is a great way to get people feeling like they are in the shoes of your customers and interested in your product. I think after the next elevator pitch you will get even more comfortable and confident giving the speech and it will flow just a little better. Looking forward to your next one. Great job!!